Below is the first page of my new novel-in-progress. I jump cut from scene to scene. Hopefully this technique is not too confusing. Have you read other novels that use this structure? At the front of the book I’ll be adding a Character List and a Character Map to show how the major characters are connected, to help with the confusion issue. The working title is ‘Missing in Cooper Park’.
The tennis courts at Cooper Park were flooded in the night. One and a half hours of non-stop rain and hail caused a landslide down through the gully. Gypsy, a Golden Labrador came along and splashed in fast-flowing Cooper Creek. Later, the sight of the ruined courts covered in mud and stones, leaves and tree branches like a murky swamp was to shatter Steve’s morning.
Kingston (Carol’s ex) turned up again on the morning after the storm. He stood on the doorstep looking unbalanced. His cigarette was burned down to the filter. His unshaven face was flecked with grey and white. Carol wouldn’t let him in. She’d taken his key back.
Carol didn’t tell Steve about Kingston being back but Steve told Carol about the flooded tennis courts.
The moon was high in the darkening dusk as Rosemary puffed past the tennis courts at Cooper Park and continued on up through the steep incline of the gulley swinging a curved stick with tennis ball.
‘Gypsy,’ cried Rosemary. ‘Gypsy, Gypsy, Gypsy! Come here.’
Rosemary had purchased Gypsy after overcoming her husband’s resistance. They were still in mourning over having to put Buddy down.
She’d promised Philip she’d make sure Gypsy didn’t jump up on the newly-cleaned couches.
He knew Rosemary slipped into depression if she didn’t have a dog to love, even though she was the mother of three children.
They’d bought a puppy who looked just like a baby Buddy. Rosemary would have liked to say it was Buddy re-incarnated but didn’t. This was precisely the kind of talk that made her husband go red with anger.
It was he who had named the Golden Labrador Gypsy. The day would soon be night.
Steve lay in bed waiting for Carol’s alarm to go off. Outside someone had slept all night in a car.
‘Don’t let anyone in,’ demanded Carol in a dream.